double duvet, Francesca asked herself how something as gentle as her
love for the dashing Count Gustav could arouse such blazing passion.
His touch sent shivers down her spine. ‘Why do you torment me so?’
she cried, as the delicate lace of the 100% cotton bedset with matching
slip pillowcases moistened with her tears.
Her indifferent heart had never been touched! But as they fell upon
the 50% polycotton/silk mix bedset something stirred in her soul that
no man had ever glimpsed.
‘You little fool!’ he blazed.‘Don’t you know a buccaneer’s man-o-war
is no place for a lady?’ But as her eyes lingered upon his waterproof
mattress protector he felt his heart slowly melting.
Again the last is perhaps a little cheeky but certainly worth
showing the client, if only to prove I haven’t been staring out of
the window all day.
Example five – product leaflet
The job
A new brand of luxury espresso needed a small-format leaflet to
go inside a smart tin containing their bagged-up coffee beans. I
didn’t have a brief as such, just a couple of fairly detailed inter-
views with the CEO and his chief taster and some verbal
instructions. What came out of that was a number of key words
(‘smooth’, unique’, ‘quality’, ‘excellence’, ‘obsession’ – you get
the picture) and lots of background bumph about estate terroir,
roasting and so on. It was all good stuff but slightly unfocused
and underwhelming – a problem for a drink positioned (and
priced) at the super-premium end of the market.
The piece
Reading through the raw material I notice that the taster used
the phrase ‘the secret of our success’ several times. Ah, so they
have multiple secrets of their success. That’s promising – it
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